The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table
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the number of tourist to
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the ashdown
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ashdown
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museum from the
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.the table
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the consequence
off
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surveys asking
guest
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interest
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they were
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their visit during the same period
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,
although
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guests
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dissatisfied from
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before refurbishment was
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, but
also
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after
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the
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guest
was the largest. The number of no
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was the lowest. From the
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before it
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, the proportion of dissatisfied
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guests
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was the highest at 40%
while
the satisfied
guest
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guests
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stood at 30%
whereas
the figure for very dissatisfied was lower at 10%.
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was 5% in comparison with 15% for very satisfied,the
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no response
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guest
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accounted
5
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%
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year
after of
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witnessed significant growth in the fraction of
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who
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satisfied and satisfied from 15% and 30% to 35% to 40% respectively.
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the
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proportion
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proportion
of dissatisfied and very dissatisfied underwent a noticeable climb from 40% and 10% to 15% and 5% respectively, the
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no response
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accounted the same
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, guest with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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