Some people think that printed books are no longer needed in the digital era, because all writing can be stored electronically. Others think printed books will still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

At present, with the development of technology, some
people
think printed
books
can be phased out in the digital era. All
people
need is electronic
storage
.
However
, other
people
think printed
books
also
play a significant role. In my opinion, printed
books
cannot be phased out, and they will play an important role in our learning lives.   Electronic
storage
has a plethora of benefits.
Firstly
, it is more convenient to read compared with paper
books
. In current society,
people
usually just download an application, and
then
they can enjoy the reading whenever and wherever. Applications are known for their enormous
storage
,
such
as thousands of novels or
books
in one application.
This
means that
people
do not need to carry loads of
books
when they travel on a train, which could reduce
people
’s burden.
Secondly
, it is environmentally friendly and highly cost-effective because it saves a lot of trees.
Finally
, it is easily stored and not likely to be destroyed by some accidents,
such
as earthquakes, windstorms, and so on.   As for printed
books
, the
books
could be handed from one generation to the next. It is very valuable for preservation and commemoration.
Moreover
, some
books
are worthy of being kept for their historical meaning.
Also
, for some children, printed
books
are good for their learning
instead
of electronic
storage
books
. The reason is good for their eyesight.   In conclusion, printed
books
will still play an important role in the future. The digital era still requires printed
books
, and e-
books
cannot replace them.
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