Your sibling has sent you a letter asking for an update on your life. Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: - Describe what you did for your last birthday - Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday - Talk about something you are looking forward to

Dear Amar,                  I am really excited to hear from you. Hope you are doing well.  I am doing extremely great in life.I am well settled in
job
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my job
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now. I
have been
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was
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promoted
as
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to
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manager
couple
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a couple
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of months ago. Thanks for sending me the
birthday
card.
Firstly
, I would like to share about  my
birthday
, It was
a
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exciting day, filled with fun and surprises. it started with the
Birthday
Eve. My kids and wife arranged a
birthday
surprise with a wonderful gift and cake. On the
birthday
afternoon we all
been
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went
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to
restaurant
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the restaurant
a restaurant
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for lunch.
Restaurant
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The restaurant
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staff
has
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gave
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gifted a voucher on the occasion of my
birthday
. Later on in the
evening
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evening,
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we had a party with friends and
neighbour
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neighbours
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. It lasted till late
night
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at night
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. it finished
of
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off
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with dance and lots of fun. But on each occasion, I missed you a lot. I still remember how we used to celebrate our birthdays together.
Moreover
, I remember your
birthday
also
comes in the
last
week of the same month. I heard that you have been on
holiday
on
you
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your
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birthday
. please share me the details of your
holiday
. which destination you have been
, how
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to, how
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was
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were
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you
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your
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experience,
most
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and most
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important the cost of the trip
.
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Please remember to share your
holiday
video and photos.
It
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been a year
we
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since we
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all
meet
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met
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. So,
Lets
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Let's
let us
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plan for a
holiday
in the coming summer with our families. where we can give
our self
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ourselves
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enough time. Hope to hear from you soon Best Regards Anand
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Maintain a conversational and engaging tone throughout the letter to reflect the interpersonal nature of writing to a sibling.

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