Some people hold the view that a good teacher is more important for education success while others think the student’s attitude is more important to succeed in education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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difficult to teach. On the one hand, it is argued that a good
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success
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about
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and
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about math, English, geography or history that teachers teach a
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provide for
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, it is strongly believed by
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if
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practise
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ahead so they based on that they easier to succeed. A second point is that
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is more important than qualifications.
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is more important to succeed in
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difficult to teach.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inspire
  • motivate
  • engaged
  • persist
  • responsibility
  • resources
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational outcomes
  • discipline
  • study habits
  • interdependent
  • individualized support
  • complex concepts
  • overcome challenges
  • receptive student
  • external factors
  • family support
  • peer influence
  • socio-economic status
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