The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, and 2015.
The chart illustrates the proportion of school kids learning to play 4 different musical instruments in 2005, 2010 and 2015.
It is clear that
, while
the percentage of student
learning Fix the agreement mistake
students
piano
, guitar and drums increased, the opposite was true for violin. Also
, piano
was the most common instrument in the most of years.
In 2005, there was about roughly 12% of school Add an article
the piano
a piano
student
learning to play Fix the agreement mistake
students
piano
, in comparison with over 10% for guitar. In the next 10 years, the figure for student
learning Fix the agreement mistake
students
piano
increased significantly to a fifth in 2010 and roughly 37% in 2015. During the period, the proportion of kids choosen
to learn guitar went up by 7% in 2010 Correct your spelling
chosen
choose
then
accounting for over 40% and become
the most popular musical instrument at school in 2015.
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became
Look
at the remaining kinds of instruments, there was an upward trend from 5% in 2010 to nearly 9% in 2015 after staying at 5% over a period of 5 Wrong verb form
Looking
year
starting from 2005. In Change to a plural noun
years
contracy
, the percentage of Correct your spelling
contrast
violians
accounted for below 10% in 2005, which was followed by Correct your spelling
violations
violins
the
downward trend to roughly 5% in 2010.Correct article usage
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