Some people think that parents should teach their children to be good members of society However, others believe School is the best place to learn this. Discuss both the view and give your opinion

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Few individuals believe that
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should teach their children to become
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members
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society
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. But, others think
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place
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learn
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school
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latter
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notion can be beneficial,
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in my opinion
parents
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should teach their children to become
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good
citizens
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School
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is a good
place
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to learn how to become
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good members
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members
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of a
society
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.
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means there are teachers who
knows
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about
the
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society
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more than their students, which helps to guide them and helps
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them to
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become
to
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better
members
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at
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society
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USA
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the USA
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, a
school
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has started teaching about
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to their students which helps them to become
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good citizens
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citizens
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in future.
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,
school
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is one of the best
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place
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places
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to learn,
to
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and to
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become a good
society
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members
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. I
beleve
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believe
parent's
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parents
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should tutor their
kids
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to become
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better citizens
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citizens
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because
parents
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know their
childs
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children
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better than anyone in the world and
also
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they know
about
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more about
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their community than any other random people. It means that
,
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parents
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know their
children's
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children
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since their birth and they know
ther
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their
every
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behaviour
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and
activities
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activity
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.
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, they know about
there
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their
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society
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more than other people people from different societies like
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teachers
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and other
members
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from different
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society
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societies
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.
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, in
uk
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UK
,
parents
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started teaching
there
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their
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kid's
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kids
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what
is
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are
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positive and
negitive
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negative
things
of
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about
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their
society
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.
Which
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may help
alot
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a lot
to
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apply
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kids
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to become better
citizens
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in
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comming
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coming
days.
therefore
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,
parentsare
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parents are
better teachers for their sons and daughters to become
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good members
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members
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of the community. In conclusion,
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school
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can be a good
place
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for
kids
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to learn and become
a
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apply
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good
society
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members
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. But, I believe
parents
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are the best
tutor's
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tutors
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for
kids
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to become
a better
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better citizens
a better citizen
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citizens
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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