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The diagram shows the design of a modern landfill for household waste.

The diagram shows the design of a modern landfill for household waste.
The process diagram illustrates
about
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the information of how the modern
landfill
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 is made by
the
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apply
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household garbage.
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, there are four stages of making the modern
landfill
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 namely the first two stages of construction, use and closure.
Clay
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 is the main
ingredients
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ingredient
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 of
this
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 design. The diagram shows that the initial
stage
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 of making
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landfill
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a landfill
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 is the
man- made
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man-made
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 hole from the natural rock, men broke the biggest natural rock through
hole
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the hole
a hole
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.
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 inside of the
landfill
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 drainage pipes and drainage taks are fixed by using two ingredients
such
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 as synthetic substance and
clay
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,
this
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 is the second
stage
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 of the modern
landfill
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 process and under the construction
stage
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 too.
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, use is the third process of its, waste, liquid and
clay
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 put into the
landfill
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,
this
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 is considered household waste. All the household rubbish can
put
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be put
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 into
this
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landfill
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 for
fermented
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fermentation
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 in many days.
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, it
need
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needs
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 to be closed for fermenting without air and sun by the natural rocks, pipes,
clay
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 and gases, it
closed
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is closed
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 by
strong
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a strong
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 cap
its
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apply
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made
by
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of
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clay
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. Closure is the final
stage
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 of
this
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 modern
landfill
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 design.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thereafter".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words landfill, clay, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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