THE DEVELOPMENT OF TOURISM CONTRIBUTED TO ENGLISH BECOMING THE MOST PROMINENT LANGUAGE IN THE WORLD. SOME PEOPLE THINK THIS WILL LEAD TO ENGLISH BECOMING THE ONLY LANGUAGE TO BE SPOKEN GLOBALLY. WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES?
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