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Some people believe that reading is always a good habit. Others feel it depends on which books a person is reading. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #habit #books #person
People have different views
whether
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 reading should be a good habit or it depends
which
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 book is
reading
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While
 reading scientific
book
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 is useful, I believe that individuals can choose whatever they want. On the one hand, reading scientific
books
are
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 more important and useful than the fairytales or
reading
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movies since
,
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 they just spend their
gold
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free
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 time.
In stead
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 of reading these kinds of
books
, they can read historical or encyclopaedias can develop their world views and gain valuable knowledge that they need.
On the other hand
, I believe that we can choose
books
 which we want to read because our minds do not accept
informations
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information
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 that we do not desire. If we read all kinds of
books
 we can develop our memories or take notes that we read recently
also
 we can set success for our future and
this
 can assist to achieve
successful
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result
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.
Additionally
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 we may exercise our brain so
this
 might
be reduce
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 stress. In conclusion, I can understand why people might want to read scientific articles, but it seems to me that reading different stories are much more fun and
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 habit
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mental stimulation
  • knowledge acquisition
  • vocabulary expansion
  • stress reduction
  • memory improvement
  • analytical thinking
  • empathy
  • emotional intelligence
  • social cues
  • constructive content
  • morally uplifting
  • misinformation
  • harmful ideologies
  • critical reading skills
  • credible sources
  • inherently good habit
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