This diagram below shows the manufacturring process for making suger from suger cane.
The rendered chart illustrates the manufacturing process for making
sugar
from sugar
cane.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that there are seven main steps to make
Wrong verb form
making
sugar
with the help of sugar
cane. Also
, the second step is done with the help of machines and manual
.
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manuals
According to
the given diagram, at first,
sugar
canes are planted and they take 12 to 18 months to grow. Afterwards, the harvesting of sugar
canes
were started by two methods Fix the agreement mistake
cane
such
as with tools and by hand. Moreover
, the sugar
cane is crushed with a crushing machine for juice
. In the fourth step, once the material has been crushed, the juice
is purified with the limestone filter.
Moving further
, filtered juice
is kept on the heat in a container for an evaporator and the juice
becomes syrup. Apart from
this
, the centrifuge helps to separate sugar
crystals from syrup. Lastly
, sugar
is kept in the large drum for drying and cooling.Submitted by svmaibcamaibs on
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