The chart below give information on the consumption of water by agricultural products in Australia in 2014, and the share of income they produced.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of water consumption in six parts of agricultural production and the percentage of
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earnings
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parts in Australia in 2014.
It can be inferred that, Change preposition
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livestock had been the highest water consumer, but
the income achieved from it was the lowest one. Remove the conjunction
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However
, fruit
section had the highest revenue Correct article usage
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other parts in 2014.
It is obvious thatChange preposition
among
,
36% of water was allocated to livestock,but Remove the comma
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income was 5% whilst fruit’Correct your spelling
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double of it’s water used at 20% and 40% respectively. Correct article usage
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Moreover
,the percentage of other usages was as same as sugar in terms of water consumption and income generation at 10% . While
rice had the minimum usage of water just 5% , it’s
income generation was quadruple of Correct your spelling
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water used almost 20 %. Correct your spelling
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Furthermore
, 20% of water consumption and income generation pie charts were constituted by dairy throughout the year.Submitted by s.keramati381 on
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