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living in a country where you have a speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Introduction
in modern
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time
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language
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 is
most
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the most
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 important for every peoples its local or foreign
language
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 in a
country
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time speak
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speaking
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 a foreign
language
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 can cause serious social problems
also
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 practical problems I completely agree with
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 statement.
Body paragraph 1
to commence with, any kind of
language
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 is significant for
individual
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the individual
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 because when any
person
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 will
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 to
different
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a different
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 type of
country
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in
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at
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this
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masked
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 need for
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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 need
to
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English
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 because English is
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an international
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language
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 that causes
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need
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language
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 because nowadays all
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 people now
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language
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with out
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 instruct and for in the Angry age or international
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 go to
other
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another country
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country
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person
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face
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 lots of
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problem
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. for instant when if any
person
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will visit
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 a
country
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 that
time
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 he does not
talk
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speak
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this
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country
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country's
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language
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then
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face
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problem
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problems
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cheater
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cheaters
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 thief etc.
Body paragraph 2
on the other hand
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, when any
person
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go
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goes
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 to a new
country
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that
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this
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time
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face
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 and if on cheater in
this
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time
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 is he will not
to
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be able to say him.
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also
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 when
go
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he goes
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 to any shop that
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 may he cannot speak with
this
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country
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 people in
this
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 moment again you will
face
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problem
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 that causes the I think foreign
language
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 is most important for us. how were foreign
language
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 will not need all
time
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time
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problem
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the problem
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 for
foreign
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the foreign
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language
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 but good to know.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
language
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 is most important for every situation
is
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local
on
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or
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 foreign both
is
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are
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 significant that causes anytime anywhere if any
person
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do
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 to visit that
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 he can move easily.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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