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Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is the biggest source of pollution and waste. Others think that industries are the ones causing pollution. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that the rising number of
cars
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 is the primary source of
pollution
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 and garbage
whereas
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other
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others
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atributed
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attribute
to
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it to
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 the industries.
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would
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 on only elaborate the both aspects but
also
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highlights
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ownviewpoint
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own viewpoint
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 the second idea.
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 with, the high demand
of
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for
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cars
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 in
city
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the city
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 directly results in air
pollution
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. Consumption of fuel in car release harmful gases
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 as sulphur dioxides Ampania, Mito oxide and corben manoride which directly mix with the
water
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 in our atmosphere
then
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 causes
diferent
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different
 phenomenon
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 as acid rain, Change in weather and
fequent
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frequent
 rain.
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, when there is
high
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a high
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 number of
cars
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, the road remains the same
that
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which
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 causes a huge
trafficjam
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traffic jam
traffic-jam
 with more noise
pollution
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.
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.
According to
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 a report by
Indian
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the Indian
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 government 20% of noise
pollution
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 in India is
resulted
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caused by
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cars
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.
on the other hand
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, industrial
pollution
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 is very hazardous and
rempant
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rampant
remnant
. Different types of wastes
generated
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are generated
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 in
Industy
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Industry
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apply
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which
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are
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non-decomposable
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non decomposable
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non-decomposable
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 and directly dumped in landfill that takes
hundred
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hundreds
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 of years to rot causing soil and
water
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pollution
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.
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,
In china
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in China
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, industries accounted for nearly 31% of
water
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pollution
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.
Furthermore
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, sea creatures are
in
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 the verge of extinction because of the harmful gases and other
materiall
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material
materials
 filled in
water
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such
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 as toxins and plastics from
water
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 contamination by industry.
Hence
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, it is
also
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 the main reason for typhoid and Cholera seen in
human
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humans
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, which causes millions of
death
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deaths
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 annually. In conclusion, raising awareness and strict rules and
regulation
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regulations
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 is a more sensible approach towards
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handling
handing
handding
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handling
pollution
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Therefore
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, Joint efforts of government and
citizen
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citizens
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keeps
kelps
skelps
ikelps
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help
 to fight
with
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apply
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this
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