Average number of years spent at school (1970-2009)

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line graph is about how many
years
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students went to school
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average all over the world, but regionally. The data covers the period from 1970 to 2009. If the data is overlooked, the average
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students spent at school increased steadily decade by decade. In North America and Western Europe, the
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number
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of
years
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rose gradually from 13 in 1970 to 16 in 2009,
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much fluctuation at all.
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, Central and Eastern Europe had a steady increase in schooling
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.
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Arab States had a sharp jump from 5
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in 1970 to 7
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in 1980.
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decades, the numbers still
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, but steadily. The region had the most significant jump up to 11
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in 2009. Contrasting with
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regions,
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Latin America and the Caribbean had
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fluctuate
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changes.
However
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, it had a remarkable increase in
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a number
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of schooling
years
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along
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during
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the period.
To sum up
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, the world
had
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the
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record
of
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for
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increasing
numbers
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number
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of
years
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that
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students
well
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spent
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spend
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in
schools
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school
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