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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
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The provided chart presents the
amount
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number
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 of magazines sold per head
in particular
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 countries between 2023 to 2005 and
estimated
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the estimated
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 2007
sales
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the majority of magazine individual
sales
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 is in
country
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 B
whereas
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Country
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 E
have
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has
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 the smallest contribution during surveyed years.
Alought
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Although
Country
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 A,B and C show the same downward trend,
Country
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 D
have
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has
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a
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an
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 upwards trend and
Country
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 E experienced
flucatution
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fluctuation
fluctuations
 during the years.
To begin
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 with, the largest distribution of personal
sales
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 in the
begining
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beginning
 was
country
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 B with
50dollars
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50 dollars
, followed by
country
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 A and C with
near
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nearly
show examples
 50
dollars
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 and approximately
48dollars
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48 dollars
 respectively.
In addition
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with
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apply
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,
these
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this country
these countries
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country
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 showed continuous
dropped
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drops
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 and predicted
decreased
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decreases
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 by
5-10dollars
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5-10 dollars
 in 2007. Despite
these three
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this three country
these three countries
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country
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had
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having
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 a downward tendency,
it
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they
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 still shared the largest shares of the market. On the other
hands
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hand
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, personal magazine
sales
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 of
Country
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 D started at under
20dollars
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20 dollars
 and reached 20
dollars
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 in 2005
along with
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 a projection to
22dollars
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22 dollars
 in 2007. In comparison,
Country
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 E showed
flucatution
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fluctuation
fluctuations
 during the period from
5dollars
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5 dollars
 to
7dollars
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7 dollars
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, country, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Comparison
  • Significant
  • Projected
  • Sales
  • Economy
  • Digital Media
  • Impact
  • Cultural Factors
  • Analysis
  • Future Trends
  • Market Conditions
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