The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries
The given graph depicts the yearly
water
usage of distinct industries in some nations.
Overall
, ground
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groundwater
water
is the main source
for most industries, except food/drinks and machinery. Chemicals is
the field that Change the verb form
are
have
the highest Change the verb form
has
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
water
usage while
that of fuel and texitles
are the lowest. Correct your spelling
textiles
In addition
, the difference between ground
and public supply water
is biggest in paper and machinery.
The industry of chemicals use
the highest number of Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
water
with the
total of 650 Correct article usage
a
million
of
cubic meters, with Change preposition
apply
ground
water
is
the main Correct your spelling
as
source
that take
up Change the verb form
takes
two third
of the field's Correct your spelling
two-thirds
water
supply. Metal and food/drinks follow with 330 million
and 310 million
, respectively. However
, ground
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groundwater
water
is the main source
of water
supply for making metals while
public supply water
is used more for food/drinks.
Paper
industry Correct article usage
The paper
use
around 210 Change the verb form
uses
million
cubic meters with water
from the ground
is used almost 10 times more than water
from public
supply. Add an article
the public
a public
In contrast
, in the production of machines, public supply water
is the main source
with 100 million
cubic meters used whereas
the usage of ground
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groundwater
water
is only 10 million
. The fields of fuel and textiles both use the least amount of water
at 80 million
and 90 million
, respectively, with ground
Correct your spelling
groundwater
water
is
used 7-8 times higher than public Wrong verb form
being
water
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, ground, source, million with synonyms.
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