The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The line graph displays
the
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information about the residents who live in four countries in a thirty-
year
period and in the prediction of 2030 to 2040, measured in proportion. In general, the percentage of Indonesian people
were
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the lowest at the beginning but took over Thailand and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, including in the prediction
year
(2030-2040). Meanwhile, the proportion of
Malaysia's
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Malaysia
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consistently became the highest. In the
year
of
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1970, the proportion saw a 10% and continued to go up and take over the
amount
of
Thailand
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Thailand's
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population
at more than 40% in 2010.
In addition
,
the
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Indonesia's
population
will grow up
until
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to
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60% in 2040. Meanwhile, the percentage of
Thailand
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Thailand's
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population
started from nearly 20% and slightly increased to around 30%, and it will reach nearly 50% in 2040. On the other side,
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the Philippines'
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Philippines'
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Philippines
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began from the highest
amount
in the
year
of
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1970 and went up sharply to 50% in 1990 but decreased to about 40% in the following 20 years, but it will reach more than 50%
in
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the end of prediction
year
(2040) Regarding the
amount
of Malaysia's
population
, it started from 30% and soared
year
over
year
until
reach
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more than 70% in 2020.
Furthermore
, it was predicted that the
amount
will reach approximately 80% in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, amount, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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