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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In some parts of the world, a plethora of people are being attracted to the facts and stories behind their
residence
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This
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 phenomenon has two main
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 which I will elaborate on them in the subsequent paragraphs.
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as a matter of
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at
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 the contemporary era,
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 has resulted in numerous flats
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 exactly
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 plan, architecture and even similar
design
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 and
material
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. It is believed that a broad range of people
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 not
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 similarity in
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 case, and they tend to be special. To cite
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 example, I personally act extremely picky when it comes to choosing an accommodation. I vividly remember two years ago when I was
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 for a residence, I saw more than twenty apartments and
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finally
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 I chose the one which was different the most, and I asked the realtor about the building’s background.
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safety issues in these modern days
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 a vital role
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 a place for housing. There are several hazards related to
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such
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 as
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 and being mugged which we can prohibit those potential dangers by getting to know about the material and the location.
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, my father used to live in a district in Tehran city called Baharestan,
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 the buildings were mostly run-down, plus the area was not suitable for living
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 a huge range of petty crimes
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 as pick-pocketing and shop-lifting.
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, with regard to less creative architecture and some safety problems, being curious about the background of the residence is getting more appealing among most population and
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 trend gives individuals a sense of being unique and tranquil.

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logical structure
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supported main points
Support your main points with specific examples and evidence. Avoid making general or vague statements. Citing personal examples is excellent, but make sure they are directly relevant and contribute to a deeper understanding of the topic.
complete response
Address all parts of the task to provide a complete response. In this case, ensure that you discuss both reasons for the interest in learning about the history of one's home and ways people can research this history.
clear comprehensive ideas
Develop your ideas fully into clear, well-explained concepts. Strive for comprehensive paragraphs that elucidate the reasoning behind the trend and expand on how individuals can pursue information about their home's history.
relevant specific examples
Provide relevant and specific examples to back up your points. While personal anecdotes can be useful, also incorporate broader examples or data to strengthen your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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