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The graph shows the nebberredfteverseas vigtters lEuredicted different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the nebberredfteverseas vigtters lEuredicted different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph line illustrates the collection of foreign tourists to three distinct localities in a particular European nation between the period 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, it is explicitly observed that the denomination of
traveler’s
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 who visited the mountainous and coastal terrains depicts an upward trend
whereas
 the number of globe trotters who preferred
lake
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the lake
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, augmented to the highest point by the era 2002 and
then
 it declined
afterwords
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afterwards
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. It is imperative to provide clarity that, the figure
of
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for
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 the coastal sector visitors was 40000 which eventually stumbled down by 10000 in 1992,
whereas
 the
quantity
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number
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 of explorers hiked steadily from the period 1992 to 2007
were
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 30000 to 75000. In comparison, the collection of mountain dwellers commenced at approximately 20000 in the year 1987 after that it progressively escalated till 1997.
In addition
, there was an insubstantial change from the era 1997 to 2001
moreover
, it
spiraled
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spiralled
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 from 30000 to almost 35000 denominations of tourists from 2002 to 2007.It is
lucid
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clear
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 that, in 1987 the constant of visitors for the lake segment, commenced at 10000 which was the lowest threshold compared to
other
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the other
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 two segments. Apart from that there was an upsurge
of
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in
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 lake visitors from 1987 to 1997.
Thereafter
 it plummeted to 75000 in 2002,
however
, it tripped to 50000 tourists by 2007.
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