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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?

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present
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people
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being
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becoming
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 more familiar with digitalization and
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reading
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 the
news
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 with the help of the
internet
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. But the majority of
people
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 believe that the most valuable and authentic source for
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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. I completely disagree with
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 statement, I believe we are living in
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 century ,where everything has been digitalized as
people
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 are more convenient and comfortable reading the
news
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internet
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 rather than buying
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and wasting both money
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paper
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present
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the internet
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internet
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 are read by more
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,
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because
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 it is easy for everyone to get
news
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 from around the globe with in a click with the help of devices like phone and laptops with access
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the internet
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internet
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. Nowadays,
people
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donot
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do not
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problems
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 because of the advancement in technology.
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Newspaper
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Newspapers
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 take almost
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a day
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 to publish the
news
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 which may be enough and accurate ,
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the internet
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internet
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 we can consume
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update
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from time
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 to time and
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 covers
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important information about several sectors not only about politics but
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sports and
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conflicts
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 all around the world.
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Internet
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The Internet
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 not only
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spreads
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,
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but teacher
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 can teach their students
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 online classes. For
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instance,
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 the period of corona
student
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students
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 can learn
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from
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 home with the help of the
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 which
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 an excellent idea in that situation.
This
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, the
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internet
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are
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 more significant than
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,
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e-
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 are reasonable and eco-friendly
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physical
newspaper
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are
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 made of
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 and it is manufactured in huge
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 which harms
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nature.
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 around the globe
understood
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understand
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 that the impact on
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 of
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 directly
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 the environment
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,
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online
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whereas online
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news
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donot
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do not
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paper
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,
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the
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 recent survey
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 that the wastage of
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 has been increased and used as a burning material which
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 pollutes the air.
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the internet
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 is eco-friendly and can be used easily. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
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e-
newspaper
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 are more relevant
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source
soure
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 of
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 as it is
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 to read and friendly at the present time
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as
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well as it do not
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nature

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Your introduction should clearly state your position on the given topic. The body paragraphs should present separate ideas, support them with specifics, and maintain a clear progress of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Maintain paragraphing by grouping related information together, and use cohesive devices, such as linking words and phrases, appropriately to help with the flow of ideas.
task achievement
In the introduction and throughout the essay, clearly express your viewpoint and ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and purpose.
task achievement
Make sure to fulfill the task by sufficiently responding to the question, include relevant, specific examples to support your ideas, and ensure that your opinion is clear and consistent throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Work on the accuracy of language use, including spelling, vocabulary, and grammar, to make it easier for the reader to understand your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • newspaper
  • internet
  • source
  • people
  • important
  • majority
  • reliable
  • information
  • read
  • daily
  • routine
  • generation
  • access
  • article
  • community
  • comfortable
  • opinion
  • trustworthy
  • difference
  • change
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