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Writing Samples
Band 3

Many people think that museums and gallaries should only show work from local artists rather than work from other countries do you agree?

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Some individuals believe that local
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artists
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 work should only be shown in
gallaries
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 and
museums
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 rather than other
regions
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regions'
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artist
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however
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this
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 essay will disagree with
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 statement because art is something that should be
revealead
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revealed
 to all
arround
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around
 the
world
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. To commence with the view, everyone has a right to enjoy the craft of
craftman
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craftmen
 all over the
world
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. Art is not the property of one region it gives too much information to learn about someone's
prospective
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perspective
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 and cultural diversity
for instance
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 if
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 hussains paintings are not shown to the
world
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then
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 how can other country's
artists
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 explore their talent
.
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Secondly
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, if people from other counties visit to see
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gallaries
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galleries
 and
museums
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 it will enhance the
buiseness
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business
 of
local
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the local
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 area's people
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 it will encourage
artists
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 to do work more efficiently and broaden their
mind
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minds
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 it can be helpful in breaking down the barriers of mind
also
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 people can know about other's cultures, traditions and customs. In conclusion, art is something which should not be hidden from anyone because it gives
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 of
benifits
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benefits
 to
artists
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as well as
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 to the authority of
museums
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 and
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gallaries
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galleries
. So
i
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 strongly assert that
museums
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 and
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gallaries
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galleries
 should showcase
everykind
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every kind
 of work from anyone in the
world
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.
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