In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?
In some countries, there is
rising
question that having Add an article
a rising
the rising
own
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your own
house
is more crucial for people rather
than renting it. There are many possible reasons for Rephrase
apply
this
dilemma, which varies one
to another. Even though Change preposition
from one
this
situation might have some negative side
, probably positive ones overweight them.
One of the main reasons why only at home is essential for people is that it provides feelings Fix the agreement mistake
sides
such
as security and stability. People who rent an apartment or a house
, sometimes have to change the residence inn
, unexpected circumstances, Correct your spelling
in
due to
owners
decisions, or because of inflation which may affect the fares. Change noun form
owners'
owner's
For instance
, well settled
family, which have been living in a particular apartment for several years, suddenly Add a hyphen
well-settled
asked
to leave the Wrong verb form
asks
house
, because owner
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the owner
has
decided to give it to another couple, but. In Wrong verb form
had
this
situation, they have to move, even if they already get used to that location and neighbors
.
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neighbours
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The positive
sides
of Fix the agreement mistake
side
this
development, in my point of view, are having reliable neighbors
, with whom Change the spelling
neighbours
owner
of the Add an article
the owner
house
would have a long-term relationship. Having such
a neighbor
is Change the spelling
neighbour
very
essential in some urgent Rephrase
apply
situation
, where instant help is needed. Fix the agreement mistake
situations
For example
, when somebody broke
his arm or needs to be hospitalized, the closest person Wrong verb form
breaks
who
he can approach before, the emergency Change the pronoun
whom
arise
is his Change the verb form
arises
neighbor
. Change the spelling
neighbour
In addition
to this
house
, owner
might have more opportunity to save some funds, because he is free of any housing payment, except for its maintenance.
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the owner
an owner
To conclude
, one of the major reasons for importance
of owning a home is being in a secure environment . Add an article
the importance
Therefore
, its advantage is having reliable neighbors
and immediate help from them when it’s needed.Change the spelling
neighbours
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