In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

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question that having
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house
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is more crucial for people
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than renting it. There are many possible reasons for
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dilemma, which varies
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to another. Even though
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situation might have some negative
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, probably positive ones overweight them. One of the main reasons why only at home is essential for people is that it provides feelings
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as security and stability. People who rent an apartment or a
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, sometimes have to change the residence
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, unexpected circumstances,
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decisions, or because of inflation which may affect the fares.
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family, which have been living in a particular apartment for several years, suddenly
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to leave the
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, because
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has
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decided to give it to another couple, but. In
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situation, they have to move, even if they already get used to that location and
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.
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of
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development, in my point of view, are having reliable
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, with whom
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of the
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would have a long-term relationship. Having
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a
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is
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essential in some urgent
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situations
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, where instant help is needed.
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, when somebody
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his arm or needs to be hospitalized, the closest person
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he can approach before, the emergency
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is his
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.
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to
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house
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,
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the owner
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might have more opportunity to save some funds, because he is free of any housing payment, except for its maintenance.
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, one of the major reasons for
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of owning a home is being in a secure environment .
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, its advantage is having reliable
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and immediate help from them when it’s needed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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