IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In my opinion, the poverty of a
country
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is not depend
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 on the financial
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aids
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 of other rich
countries
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.It is only the responsibility of its own government. Education, which can be regarded as
a
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 foundation of a
country
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,is the main thing for building
developing
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the developing
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country
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.The more educated the citizens are,the greater
chance
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the chance
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 of the
country
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 to develop.
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, nowadays there are numerous
of
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scholarships offered especially to developing
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.
The financial
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aids
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 from other developed
countries
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 might be helpful but it
also
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 depends on the government to make well-used of
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aids
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.Making opportunities for young citizens,
guiding
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and guiding
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 them
the
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 way to
better
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 life are other kinds of help for developing
countries
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. In conclusion, I would like to argue that the future of a
country
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 should not depend on other
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countries
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aids
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.It is only the responsibility of the government and citizens to make changes for themselves. C

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introduction conclusion present
Your response lacks a clear introduction and conclusion that directly addresses the essay question. The introduction should clearly state your position on the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement, and the conclusion should summarize your main points effectively.
logical structure
The logical structure of your essay is weak, with ideas not flowing naturally from one to the next. Utilize clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to outline the main idea, and ensure that each subsequent sentence supports and develops that idea.
supported main points
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complete response
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clear comprehensive ideas
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relevant specific examples
Your essay lacks specific examples to illustrate the points made. Specific examples are crucial because they provide evidence to support your arguments and make your essay more persuasive. Consider using case studies, statistics, or cited expert opinions to bolster your points.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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