The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information about the
reasons
behind
people
commuting by bike and car.
Overall
,
people
cycling
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to
work
mostly
duet
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due
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to health and
environmetal
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environmental
reasons
while
people
driving
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to
work
because of comfortable feelings. Related to the given data,
the
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most workers who cycling to
office
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due to
health and air pollution issues. Both
reasons
share the same amount of proportion at 30%. The other aspects
which
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also
mentioned in the survey
is
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parking issue at 15%, economics aspect at 13%, and 12% argued that cycling is faster than driving. Based on the statistics, the highest proportion of
people
reasons
in
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driving to
work
is comfortable feelings at 40%.
This
number is nearly doubled the distance to
work
reasons
at 21%. There are two factors that
shared
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the same percentages at 14% which
is
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are
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the
speeed
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speed
and the practice
reasons
. The lowest percentage of
people
going to
work
using
car
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a car
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is the safety
reason
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reasons
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at 11%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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