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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts give information about the
reasons
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 behind
people
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 commuting by bike and car.
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,
people
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cycling
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cycle
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 to
work
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 mostly
duet
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due
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 to health and
environmetal
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environmental
reasons
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while
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people
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driving
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drive
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 to
work
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 because of comfortable feelings. Related to the given data,
the
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apply
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most workers who cycling to
office
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the office
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due to
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 health and air pollution issues. Both
reasons
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 share the same amount of proportion at 30%. The other aspects
which
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also
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 mentioned in the survey
is
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 parking issue at 15%, economics aspect at 13%, and 12% argued that cycling is faster than driving. Based on the statistics, the highest proportion of
people
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reasons
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in
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for
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 driving to
work
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 is comfortable feelings at 40%.
This
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 number is nearly doubled the distance to
work
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reasons
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 at 21%. There are two factors that
shared
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share
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 the same percentages at 14% which
is
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are
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 the
speeed
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speed
 and the practice
reasons
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. The lowest percentage of
people
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 going to
work
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 using
car
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a car
the car
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 is the safety
reason
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reasons
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 at 11%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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