“In many societies in the world, the population is aging rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

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since the start of the world, all of us have

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growth in population, and because of that a lot of places in the world are suffering from the increased cost of their

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supporting their

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their life like having an illness but not treating it properly or in time or in general not really

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about it. because of that, to live a good and healthy life the community

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regarding the

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the global epidemic of

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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