news media has become more infulential in peoples lives. some believe it is a negative development. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In the contemporary era,
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social
media
has become more flexible and more
infulential
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influential
in
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life
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. the majority of pupils think that it is a negative
development
. In
this
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partically
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partially
particularly
disagree.
To begin
with the constructive side, the first and
formost
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foremost
development
is that which
provide
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current
news
almost instantaneously is undeniable. It gives me a good feeling that they belong to a small global village and
individual
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totally
congizant
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cognizant
about current
news
in the world very frequently.
However
, the second and the significant
development
is that it fills up the gap between the government and the people. most
of
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the
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individual
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would never meet a prime minister or president in our lives, but these days people
everyday
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seen
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the government
due to
television. so,
thats
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that
is the most significant
development
of
news
media
.
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with the
dectructive
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destructive
side, it is true that there are
many
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good
development
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of
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news
media
but some are negative
development
of
news
media
that is
the
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harmful effect
of
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society and government.
first
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and
formost
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foremost
reason is that they
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fake
news
, directly impacting personal lives.
For example
, some celebrities suffer from depression
due to
the rumours spread in their names,
that is
the reason.
therefore
,
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reason is that there are contents like violence or prostitution which are unsuitable for children. they get easily tempted by those, which affects their mental stability.
To conclude
, It seems to me that
news
media
have
a positive phenomena
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and it is hoped that
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will continue to grow with the help of technology and modern tools.
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