Nowadays many students are participating in international exchange trips. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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us the changes in the count and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers.It is clear from the graph that there

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two types of food

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respectively over the

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dropped over the

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eaten

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pizza and

humbergers

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hamburgers

consistently increased. The pizza was about 10 to about 85 from 1975 to 2000.

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, The

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hamburgers

were about 20 to 100

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the same

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fish and chips dropped

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the

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. It was 100 in 1975.

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about 38 in 2000.

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extremely different

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in 2000.

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The information provided is incomplete and does not fully address the given topic related to students participating in international exchange trips. There is a mismatch between the essay content and the topic requirement.

coherence and cohesion

The essay has a weak structure, lacking clear introduction and conclusion specific to the given topic of international exchange trips. Furthermore, the text discusses fast food consumption, which is unrelated to the original question.

coherence and cohesion

The essay lacks a logical flow of ideas and does not develop a coherent argument about the impact of student exchange trips, instead discussing an unrelated subject of fast food consumption.

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5 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Nowadays many students are participating in international exchange trips. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

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In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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