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Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs because of it. These days Internet shopping is increasing getting popular. Discuss the impact on climate and on the individual who lost their employment?

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Due to
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 of technology, online shopping is on trend which is a negative development.It has
as
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been causing
enviromental
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environmental
 issues and
also
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people
 have been
loosing
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losing
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 their jobs too. In
this
 essay,2 main solutions will be presented followed by their possible
affect
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effects
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.
First,
in online
shoping
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shopping
people
 buy unnecessary items if they find any offer or promotions available on the site and don't use them after purchasing it which leads to wastage of resources as it
take
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alot
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a lot
 of procedures to get the item shipped and
waste
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a waste
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 of fuel
of
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 the ship.It to
depletion
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the depletion
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 of natural resources
such
 as trees and plants which leads to global warming.
As a result
, it causes
enviromental
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environmental
 issues. The second reason would be the unemployment of the
people
 who run small shops or the
saleperson
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salesperson
. Online shopping is done using the A.I. programming and doesn't need any manpower to do its job.
While
 the individuals who lose their jobs face
alot
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a lot
 of financial difficulties.
Moreover
,
this
 results in increased poverty and results in closing down of shops and being unemployed.
To sum up
, online shopping has made our life more
easire
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easier
 and
convenient
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more convenient
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, but it has shown a negative impact on
climate
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the climate
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as well as
 offering
less
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fewer
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 job
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 to
the
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people
.
However
, by taking measures they can ship the item in
a
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eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 manner. By raising
enviromental awarness
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environmental awareness
 telling
people
 about the consequences. Online firms can employ
perople
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people
 for customer services etc. and can help to reduce the poverty rate.
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