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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates international travel from Africa, America, Asia and the
pasific
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Pacific
, Europe, and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East, which changed
on
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in
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 1990, 1995, 200 and 2005. Units are measured in
million
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millions
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 of people.
Overall
, the total number of
tourism increases
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tourists increased
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 between 1990 - 2005, which highly
influence
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influenced
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from
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 each other.
Aprroximately
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Approximately
the
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apply
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Asia and the
pasific
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pacific
also
 Europe
are mostly be
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are mostly
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 higher
of
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apply
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amount
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amounts
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 every single
years
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year
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.
Moreover
,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East slightly are lowest. In the first year, 448.9
are going
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went
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aboard
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abroad
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, who mostly arrange of them 9.8 - 280.2 contributed. And
than
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then
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, uppers to 693.7 on the
last
 year between 15.8-400.2. Based on the data, are
siginificantly
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significantly
increase
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increasing
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. Those are ranged in millions. 15 years of
area
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the area
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 who went for international travel
contirbutes
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contributes
 of
spesificly
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specifically
specific
last
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the last
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 amount increased every 5 years
,
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apply
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than
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then
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range
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the range
a range
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 of the data
get
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gets
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 more information. The rank of
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the totally
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totally
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total
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 population
on
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in
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this
caser
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case
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 is Asia and the
pasific
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Pacific
more
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apply
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higher
then
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than
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 all.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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