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There is no denying the fact that computers have positive impact on children. Learning from an early age is an initiative step so it is a good step to use computers, but its time should not proceed so long.This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of using computers

#fact #computers #impact #children #age #initiative #step #time
The charts show the results of research on adult education. The bar chart provides the causes why matures decide to
study
while
 the pie chart gives the information about costs of education.
Overall
, Interest in a subject and gaining qualifications
were
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are
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 the main reasons why
adults
 want to
study
. There were three people who were responsible for the cost of each course and the individual
is
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was
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 the most responsible one. Interest in a subject and gaining qualifications were the dominating reasons for choosing to
study
 and the index
of
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apply
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its
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apply
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was about 40% each. 22 per cent of
adults
 choose to
study
 because it is beneficial for their current job. Almost an equal number of
adults
, 20%, voted for both improving prospects of promotion and enjoyment of learning as the reasons why they
decide
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decided
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 to
study
. Opportunities to change jobs and to meet people were the least popular causes of choosing to
study
 among
adults
 and only 12% and 9% of respondents
accordingly
 voted for them.
According to
 the pie chart, the costs of each course should be shared between 3 people. 40% and 35% of the cost should be shared with the individual and employer
accordingly
while
 the taxpayer should be responsible only for a quarter of it. #sevara #day2
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • positive impact
  • initiative step
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • access to information
  • educational resources
  • cognitive skills
  • problem-solving skills
  • creativity
  • digital literacy
  • communication
  • collaboration
  • health risks
  • concerns
  • digital dependency
  • excessive screen time
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