You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorect. write a letter to the editor of the magazin.In your letter correct the information in the article explan why it is important for the magazin to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter regarding an article which is about the history and traditions of Iran that was published on 17 October 2023 in Hamshahri magazine ,this
data related city called Shiraz,which, is located in the south of Iran was wrong.
Firstly
,I have seen some information which was mentioned incorrectly about the tomb of Cyrus the Great,it was said that the tomb had been situated in Ahwaz which is not correct therefore
you should correct it, additionally
,it is important to tourism
industry that transmission data to tourists and native people before they coming and visit closely.
Add an article
the tourism
a tourism
Moreover
,I recommend you set up a professional team to recheck the essays before they are published in newspapers and websites. Besides
,on the other hand
, I believe the magazine should republish the article with the correct location of the history,It would greatly benefit new tourists.
Hopefully, I will receive positive feedback in the next newspaper. Thank you in advance.
Yours sincerely,
Pardis GhobadiSubmitted by pardisghobadi on
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Ensure that all sentences are clear and complete, particularly in terms of grammar and punctuation. For example, 'moreover' and 'besides' should not be used interchangeably and need proper sentence structure.
task achievement
Although your points are clear and well-organized, include some more details or examples to fully address the importance of correct information and your recommendation.
task achievement
You effectively covered the main aspects of the prompt: correcting the information, explaining the importance of accuracy, and suggesting a solution.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured, with clear paragraphs that each address a specific point.