It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and joining universities. What are the advantages or disadvantages?

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student
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has a
year
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off between finishing
school
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and joining
universities
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. It is becoming increasingly popular than
previous
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years
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. It has some
advantages
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& disadvantages and which are different from
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to
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due to
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their
works
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and procedures. In
this
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part
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part,

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I would like to talk about
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advantages
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the advantages

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of taking a
year
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off between finishing
school
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and joining
universities
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. The
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advantages
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advantage

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of that
are
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is

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,
every
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that every

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students
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student

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have
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has

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to go to
school
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around
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12
years
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from their
begining
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beginning

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. after
the
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12
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years
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years,

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they need to join to university
to
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for

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their
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further
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education
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. After
joined
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joining

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with university they have to
spent
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spend

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more than 3
years
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to complete their degree. So
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student
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students

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can take a rest between
this
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year
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off period.
Peoples
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People

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can visit anywhere to
took
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take

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rest
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a rest

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and avoid
their
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the

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mental pressure of 12
years
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of
school
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life. Another advantage is
student
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can give their attention to
do
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apply

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some small
courses
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, which helps to get
advantage
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an advantage
the advantage

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in their
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education
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like in
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bachelors
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bachelor's

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or in
master
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master's

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program.
As
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In

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my view
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student
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students

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can join with language short
courses
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, MS
office
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Office

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program
courses
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and
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graphic design
courses
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etc..
This
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is very
helpfull
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helpful

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for their
education
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and it
convert
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converts

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to their skills and they can earn
it
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apply

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through the program. When we are talking about
disadvantages
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the disadvantages

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of taking a
year
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off between finishing
school
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and joining
universities
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, which are some
students
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applied
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apply

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for part-time jobs or full-time jobs. So, if they agreed to with under contract with their employees, they didn't move back to their
further
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education
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. They are continuing their life with that job and
students
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have to stop
to
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apply

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their
education
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temporary
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temporarily

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or
permanetly
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permanently

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.
Peoples
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People

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can't understand the
important
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importance

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of
the
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education
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in
this
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time period. They are suffering
about
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from

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their decision after
long
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a long

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time.
Then
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they can't
revised
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revise

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anything.
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In
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As
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In

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my view, I think there are
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a lot
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lot
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a lot

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of
advantages
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taking
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to taking

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a
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an

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off
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apply

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year
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period between finishing
school
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and joining
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university
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universities
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university

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. If
school
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teachers can explain
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the important
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important
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importance

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of a taking
one
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one-year

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year
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vacation between their
school
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life and before
the
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apply

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universities
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university

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, every
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students
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student

The singular quantifier every is followed by the plural noun students. Consider changing the noun to the singular or using a different quantifier.

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can complete their
further
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

education
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The essay partially addresses the task, mentioning both advantages and disadvantages, but it does not entirely fulfil the prompt as it does not offer a well-balanced discussion of the topic. The conclusion seems to indicate a personal opinion, but it is not well-supported throughout the essay. More comprehensive ideas and clear arguments need to be presented to enhance clarity. Including relevant examples would have strengthened the response and provided clearer evidence for the points made.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal growth
  • academic performance
  • career exploration
  • cultural exposure
  • academic momentum
  • financial implications
  • peer separation
  • higher education
  • maturity
  • independence
  • self-understanding
  • reinvigorate
  • career paths
  • internships
  • globalized
  • structured learning
  • study habits
  • earning potential
  • social integration
  • non-academic
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