Read the question below and write an opinion essay. You should spend no more than 40 minutes on this task. Remember to write down a clear thesis statement followed by your essay plan. Only then attempt to write this essay. With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
tecnological
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technological
era, youngsters have limited access to the
internet
as they are becoming
thw primw
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the primary
suspect
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suspects
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of cybercrimes
this days
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this day
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.
Although
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this
essy
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essay
explain
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explains
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that
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apply
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why
web
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the web
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is not a trustworthy place for kids
as well as
how people protect their loved ones from falling
in
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into
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horrible situations
while
using
internet
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the internet
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.
To begin
with,
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the world
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world wide web
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World Wide Web
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is naive to a fault, we can not trust everyone and everything that can
be
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heppen
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happen
in it. Owing to the lack of security over the
internet
, it become easier
to
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for
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every body
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everybody
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to create fake identities and run
scam
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scams
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. Mostly teenagers who are innocent are easily
gat
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get
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trapped by them.
For instance
, Facebook has banned many fake profiles after being reported for causing fraud
also
a large number of victims were school
student
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students
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. Moving
further
, I think
guardian
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guardians
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have a great
responsiblity
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responsibility
in tackling
this
situation,
instead
of prohibiting the youngsters from using electronic gadgets,
although
they can
limited
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limit
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their accessive use or block the websites. In
aditional
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addition
, parents
has
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have
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to
cheak
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check
their search history or their phones to ensure that they must not
misussing
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misusing
their freedom.
for example
, many schools are
ristricted
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restricted
from bringing their personal mobile phones
for
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to
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the age group
of
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under 15 to school. I truly believe that
this
senario
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scenario
should
be follow
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at home as well.
To conclude
,
Internet
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the Internet
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is not a
trusteble
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trustable
trustee
trusted
think
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thing
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in
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any point of view. Access to it should be limited by the elders to protect children from endangered. I
belive
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believe
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that the
mention
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prospective
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perspective
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of mine strongly supports the point.
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coherence cohesion
The essay does not present a clear thesis statement in the introduction and lacks a planned essay structure, which is crucial for coherent writing.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear, logical paragraphs. You should have an introduction with a clear thesis statement, body paragraphs each containing a main idea with supporting details, and a conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
The supporting points presented are weak and occasionally unclear, making the argument not entirely persuasive. Use more detailed and specific examples to support your points.
task achievement
The essay partially addresses the task, but the response needs to be more complete with a clearer argument. Ensure that you fully address the prompt and present a strong position.
task achievement
Use precise, clear language to express comprehensive ideas, and avoid overgeneralizations or unsupported claims.
task achievement
Specific examples and evidence are needed to effectively support your arguments. You should include relevant examples that are directly tied to the points being made.

Your opinion

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