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Band 5.5

You use public transport and have been facing issues. Write a letter to the public transport authorities. In your letter include: Why public transport is important to you What problem you face Suggest what can be done to improve public transport

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Dear
sir
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/madam, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding the
transport
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 issues I have faced lately whenever I have used
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London
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the London
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 Public
transport
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service
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. Currently, I am a student studying
in
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at
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Fanshaw
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Fanshawe
college
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College
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. The reason
of
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for
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 using
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bus
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the bus
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service
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 is that I
dont
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don't
 have my own car. So, my daily means of
commute
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commuting
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 is
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London
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the London
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transport
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bus
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service
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.
Its
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 been seven months I have been
traveling
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travelling
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 to my college by
bus
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. There are several issues I
had
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have
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 faced
while
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 using your
bus
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transport
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 which I would like you to know.
Firstly
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, the timing that shows on your
bus
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 stand board and Mobile application does not match.
Secondly
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, all buses are always running late by 15-25 minutes every day. On top of that, there
several
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are several
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 locations in
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london
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London
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 where
roads
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road
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 construction
are
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is
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 going on because of which
bus
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 stops have been changed to other location but are posted on the stop poles or in the mobile application.
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, I have
few
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a few
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suggestion
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suggestions
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 that I would like you to consider. To eliminate the
bus
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 waiting time please
increas
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increase
 the number of buses on
most
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apply
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busiest routes in the city.
Also
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, update the new
stops
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stop
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 location on the
perticular
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particular
 spot where construction is underway or generate a push
motification
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notification
 in
mobile
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the mobile
a mobile
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 app to make it
ease
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easy
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 for
everbody
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everybody
. I hope
this
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 might be helpful for you to know
to
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how to
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 improve the
bus
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service
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 within
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london
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London
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 city. Thank you, Mehfuzkhan Pathan
Submitted by mehfuzpathan97 on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea, fully developed with further explanation, examples, or details. The letter should logically progress from one point to the next, making it easy for the reader to follow your thoughts.
coherence cohesion
Effective use of transition words and phrases can enhance the readability of your letter and better link your ideas together.
task achievement
Cover all aspects of the task ensuring to provide specific details about the problems faced and possible solutions.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent formal tone throughout the letter appropriate to the context of writing to an authority.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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