The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
These maps depict
an information
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about the development
in
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the
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apply
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road
access to a
city
hospital between 2007 and 2010. it is clear from the maps that the
city
hospital witnessed significant change to serve many people in the
city
.
According to
what is shown, within three years, the hospital experienced various changes
such
as
roundabout
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a roundabout
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, public car parking, and bus station. To elaborate, in the south pole of the hospital, the main
city
road
had
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to contain one roundabout. Along the main hospital
road
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road,
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the bus parking was demolished and replaced by
bus
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a bus
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station which gave the employees more parking area in
south eastern
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southeastern
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the hospital.
In addition
, the hospital
road
developed
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was developed
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to have one roundabout rather than
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the cross
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cross
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crossroad
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road
which
make
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it easier to turn back and provided a wide bath for buses. The significant change was in the east side of the ring
road
, people had a wide area to park in and closer to the hospital.
To sum up
, we could say that the hospital had convenient transport in and out
from
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it, which
increase
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the capacity of the hospital, including
staffs
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staff
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and patients
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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