The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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The graphs indicate the modifications of the West Park Secondary

School

during a 60-year interval.

Overall

, it is explicit that it was the

school

that has kept its initial location and form within the period;

while

all the other facilities and surroundings have been changed. In 1950, it can be seen that there were three houses next to the

school

, at the front of the farmland.

Also

, a large playground was built for the

school

. Focusing on 1980, what stands out from the scheme is that the farmland was changed into a sports field which was exactly behind the new car park and science block. It is obvious that all the houses were removed with the aim of constructing new accommodations. Turning to 2010, the photo makes it clear that the area behind the

school

almost halved to contain both the playground and sports field.

Furthermore

, the space of parking was expanded significantly,

however

, the

school

and science block have maintained their shapes.

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people believe it is better to raise children in the city, while others consider the countryside to be a more suitable choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Some people think that the environment may be destroyed because of tourism. Others, however, believe that it is a way to preserve nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. !

In some societies the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. What are the reasons for this trend? And what possible solutions could reduce this issue?

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. !