The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graphs
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the rate of new
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openings versus
closures
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in a specific country over a period of 8 years.
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, it is evident that both
shop
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closures
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and openings reduced remarkably from 2011 to 2018.
According to
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the given graphs, more than 8000
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places had been opened in 2011 and it went down more than two times by 2012. After three years of an ascending trend, it reached almost 6000 new shopping openings.
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, companies’ willingness to open a new center decreased by 2015. The rate of a new mall starting stayed almost the same with 4000 shops until 2017, and in the following
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it went down by almost 25%.
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,
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the
shop
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closures
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were about 6300 in 2011, after a brief reduction in 2012, it increased in 2013 and 2014, with 7100 and 6600 shops, respectively. Interestingly, there was a significant fall
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removing
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these
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in 2015, and
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after a substantial rise to almost 5000 locations, the
closures
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phenomenon remained almost stable. In fact, approximately 5100 shops closed in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, closures with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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