The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The line chart given depicts the
number
of
inquiries
sent to the Tourist Information Office in one city via three ways of communication, which are in
person
, by
letter
/email, and by telephone, recorded for six months, from January until June 2011.
Overall
, the
number
of tourists who made their
inquiries
by telephone and directly reached out in
person
to the office increased over the period. Meanwhile, email or
letter
inquiries
became less popular. In January, the tourist information office received 900
inquiries
by call,
while
just less than 800 letters and emails were received. Only slightly over 400 queries were made in
person
. it is noteworthy that over the next three months, the telephone still remained
as
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the most popular
ways
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to make
inquiries
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approximately 1000
inquiries
. Meanwhile, the
number
of
inquiries
made directly in
person
experienced a significant growth, reaching 800 and surpassing the
number
of
inquiries
made by
letter
or email. From March to June, in a
person
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inquiries
rose sharply and became the most prevalent method of inquiry.
In contrast
, there were fewer people who sent emails or
letter
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letters
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to make
inquiries
, with just under 400
inquires
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in May and June.
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