The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The line chart depicts information about
museum’s
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museum
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attendance trends in four international
museums
from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
,
Louvre
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the Louvre
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and Vatican
Museums
witnessed positive growth
of
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in
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visitors
,
while
London
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the London
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Science
Museum
and Shenzhen
Museums
had
the
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a
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reserve (steady or negative) trend for over 35
years
.
To begin
with,
Louvre
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the Louvre
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had approximately two
time
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times
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higher
visitors
(around 8 million
visitors
) annually in the initial period than
three
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the three
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other
museums
.
Furthermore
, in the first ten
years
, the Louvre and Vatican
Museums
experienced positive growth and continued
to
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for
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the following five
years
.The Louvre’s attendance slightly increased from 1990 to 1995 period before declining
in
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from
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1995 to 2000. The
number
of
visitors
steadily springing to the
last
period with almost 10 million
visitors
each year. Meanwhile, from the year of 1995, people who attended Vatican
Museums
dramatically surged and reached its peak in 2015 at approximately 10 million
visitors
. Yet, in the first five
years
,
London
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the London
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Science
Museum
steadily maintained the
number
of
visitors
,
however
, the attendance at Shenzhen
Museum
slightly decreased.
The
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In the
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following 15
years
, the two
museums
shared
same
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the same
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growth trend with a small
number
of changes. From the year
of
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apply
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2000, the
numbers
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number
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of Shenzhen
Museum
's
visitors
rose to the initial
number
of
visitors
,
while
the London Science
Museum
plummeted to its lowest point.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words museums, visitors, museum, years, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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