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The two maps below show the Sunny Island before and after its commercialization. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the Sunny Island before and after its commercialization. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two
diagram
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 depict
that
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the sunny island before and after the construction of
area
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the area
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.
Overall
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, over the span of several years, it is observed that the development of the forest area completely
turn
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 into
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the touriest
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touriest
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tourist
tourists
 visiting place including many accommodations. Earlier, there was only
a
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land with an empty area with few trees which was surrounded by seawater with a
beach
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 at one corner. Later, the land was completely transformed with various new facilities for visitors, which includes
restaurant
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a restaurant
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, reception in
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the center
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center
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centre
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,
pier
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a pier
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 for boat,
swimming
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a swimming
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 facility on the
beach
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 and so on. Interesting
think
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thing
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 is that the plants and trees were not cut for building these constructions and most of the development
made
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was made
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 near the
beach
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.
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, the footpaths and roads for vehicle facility
has
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created
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been created
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 for tourist, where the footpath
made
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is made
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 to walk between the fifteen resting places and connected to the
beach
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 as well, and the road can join with
restaurant
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a restaurant
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,
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a resption
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resption
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reception
are
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area
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 and a pier.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beach with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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