the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
The illustrations reveal changes in a bookstore which have taken place since 2000.
Overall
, the store became much
entertaining
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,
then
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than
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it was in 2000. In 2000, the bookstore was a much boring venue without any entertainment, but during, the next years the bookshop experienced a number of superb changes.The most noticeable alter is occurring
of
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a cafe, which was accompanied by replacing
books
about cookery, hobbies and art to
a
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left side of an entrance. Three tables appeared in a venue, where these
books
stood.
Furthermore
, fiction
books
on a corner were substituted by non-fiction
books
.
As a
result
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quantity of
shelfs
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shelves
shelf
in
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the left side of the entrance became
significantally
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significantly
more
then
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in 2000.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • changes
  • occurred
  • transformations
  • developments
  • span
  • visual
  • comparison
  • illustrates
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