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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Anthropology in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Anthropology in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the occupation of
Anthropology
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graduates
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 in a university who are just completing the entire undergraduate courses,
while
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 the table reports the total salaries that they receive five years later. One noticeable feature from the pie chart is that most of the
Anthropology
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graduates
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 are working full-time. Notice that the proportion of the
graduates
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 that are unknown in terms of their employment
are
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 relatively slow which is the second smallest after part-time work and postgrad study. Meanwhile, based on the table, after five years
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 finishing their undergraduate course, the highest salaries are received by the
graduates
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 who are employed in the Government sector.
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, private companies tend to give the smallest salaries to
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graduates
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 compared with other sectors. From the data, the percentage of full-time workers for
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graduates
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account
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52
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for 52
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%.
In addition
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 to that, the proportion of
other type
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another type
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 of employment for these
graduates
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 are as follows, part-time work
15
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is 15
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%, unemployed 12%, both full-time postgrad study and not known are 8%, and the
least
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lowest
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 percentage is those who are part-time working and doing postgrad simultaneously.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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