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The Maps compares how the road access to a city hospital developed from 2007 to 2010.

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The Maps compares how the
road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital developed from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
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, the
road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital has been developed in some
area
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areas
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. Not only the
road
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, but
also
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constructionn
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construction
occured
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occurred
 in some facilities. Looking in more detail, in 2007,
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city
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the city
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 hospital
surrounded
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was surrounded
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 by three main
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road
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roads
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,
such
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 as: hospital
road
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,
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city
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a city
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road
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 and
ring
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a ring
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road
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. which is the hospital was the main access with bus
stop
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stops
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 in the west and the east along the
road
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. two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 has been seen during these 3 years, one located in the south of
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city
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the city
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 hospital link to the hospital
road
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 and the other one replaced
interjunction
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the interjunction
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 between
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 and
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city
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the city
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road
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. all the bus stop
allong
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along
 the hospital
road
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 has been demolished, in change bus station built connecting two roundabout
where
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apply
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it
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apply
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in
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on
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 the west hospital
road
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. in the east hospital
road
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,
old
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an old
the old
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 car which were for staff and
public
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the public
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 in 2010 has been specialized
limited
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and limited
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for
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to
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 staff only. in substitute,
new
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a new
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 car park for
public
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the public
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 built located in the east
accross
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across
city
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 hospital.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
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