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The Maps compares how the road access to a city hospital developed from 2007 to 2010.

#maps #road #access #city
The Maps compares how the
road
 access to a
city
 hospital developed from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
, the
road
 access to a
city
 hospital has been developed in some
area
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areas
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. Not only the
road
, but
also
constructionn
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construction
occured
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occurred
 in some facilities. Looking in more detail, in 2007,
city
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the city
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 hospital
surrounded
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was surrounded
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 by three main
road
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roads
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,
such
 as: hospital
road
,
city
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a city
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road
 and
ring
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a ring
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road
. which is the hospital was the main access with bus
stop
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stops
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 in the west and the east along the
road
. two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 has been seen during these 3 years, one located in the south of
city
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the city
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 hospital link to the hospital
road
 and the other one replaced
interjunction
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the interjunction
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 between
hospital
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the hospital
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road
 and
city
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the city
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road
. all the bus stop
allong
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along
 the hospital
road
 has been demolished, in change bus station built connecting two roundabout
where
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apply
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it
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apply
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in
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on
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 the west hospital
road
. in the east hospital
road
,
old
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an old
the old
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 car which were for staff and
public
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the public
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 in 2010 has been specialized
limited
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and limited
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for
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to
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 staff only. in substitute,
new
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a new
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 car park for
public
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the public
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 built located in the east
accross
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across
city
 hospital.
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