The Maps compares how the road access to a city hospital developed from 2007 to 2010.
The Maps compares how the
road
access to a city
hospital developed from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
, the road
access to a city
hospital has been developed in some area
. Not only the Fix the agreement mistake
areas
road
,
but also
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construction
occured
in some facilities.
Looking in more detail, in 2007, Correct your spelling
occurred
city
hospital Correct article usage
the city
surrounded
by three main Add a missing verb
was surrounded
road
, Change to a plural noun
roads
such
as: hospital road
, city
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a city
road
and ring
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a ring
road
. which is the hospital was the main access with bus stop
in the west and the east along the Fix the agreement mistake
stops
road
.
two roundabout
has been seen during these 3 years, one located in the south of Change to a plural noun
roundabouts
city
hospital link to the hospital Correct article usage
the city
road
and the other one replaced interjunction
between Correct article usage
the interjunction
hospital
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the hospital
road
and city
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the city
road
.
all the bus stop allong
the hospital Correct your spelling
along
road
has been demolished, in change bus station built connecting two roundabout where
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apply
it
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apply
in
the west hospital Change preposition
on
road
.
in the east hospital road
, old
car which were for staff and Add an article
an old
the old
public
in 2010 has been specialized Correct article usage
the public
limited
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and limited
for
staff only. in substitute, Change preposition
to
new
car park for Correct article usage
a new
public
built located in the east Correct article usage
the public
accross
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across
city
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