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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the number of
visitors
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 in three categories of places in Europe from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, mostly total of tourists increased over the
period
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 given; and
at the end
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, the highest can be seen on the coast,
conversely
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 to the mountains that
be
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are
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 the lowest, In the beginning, the
quantity
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number
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 of people who visited the coastal beach was high compared to the other site categories at 40,000;
however
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, in 1992, it gradually declined to about 350,000
visitors
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 and
then
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 significantly increased until reached a peak of around 750.000 in the
last
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period
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 shown. Compared to the lowest number of
visitors
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 in the first
period
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 given, the lakes had had
visitors
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 just
at
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apply
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10,000
,
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 but significantly rose and reached the peak of about 70,000 tourists in 2002.
Nevertheless
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, it fell down dramatically to 50,000 in 2007. On the other side, the mountains were visited by 20,000 people during 1987.
Besides
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, these areas had
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gradualgradually
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gradual gradually
 number of
visitors
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 over the
period
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 given and rose slowly until around 350,000
of
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apply
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tourists in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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