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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the manufacturing of
milk
 yearly in four different countries (
Netherlands
, Australia, Tanzania and Guatemala )
in
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three times (1990,2000 and 2010). The data was
measureed
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measured
 by litre.
Overall
, we can
seen
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 that
,
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 the amount of
milk
 production in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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had
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was
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 highest in all given
period
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periods
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. Australian
milk
manufacture
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manufacturers
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follow
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followed
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 the
Netherlands
whereas
 the fabrication of dairy
product
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products
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 in
Guetamala
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Guatemala
 had
lowest
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the lowest
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 in all years.
To begin
 with, in 1990, the number of
milk
 was 11,262,000 litres in
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and other nationalities outturn was 11,246,000 litres in Australia, 87,000
lit
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litres
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 in Tanzania and 26,000
lit
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litres
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 in Guetemala. Until 2000, the
amount
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number
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 of dairy products in
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 had shown
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a slightly
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slightly
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 decrease and it had 11,155,000 lit.
The
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Australian production had similar
changing
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 in 2000
while
 Tanzania's and Guetamala's
milk making
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milk-making
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 increased in 2000 and during the
last
 given period. In 2010,
Netherlands's
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the Netherlands's
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 production had risen from 1990. Australia's
milk making
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milk-making
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demonstared
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demonstrated
 the risen constantly.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, netherlands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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