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Band 4

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

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It has been widely claimed that more
people
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 prefer to be self-employed in
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 century than to
work
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 for
corporation
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a corporation
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 or organisation.
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 it could be considered that freelance
working
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work
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 has more advantages.
This
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 essay will
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firstly
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 discuss the reason for the claim before elaborating
why
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 I consider the situation to be
positive
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the positive
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 circumstance. To
being
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begin
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 with, it might seem reasonable to consider that
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apply
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daily life in society nowadays is surrounded by hectic
environment
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environments
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such
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 as traffic congestion causing
a
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apply
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mental health
problem
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problems
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 for
people
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 who must travel to
work
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.
This
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 is
properly
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 because
people
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 use personal cars to travel to
work
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.
For example
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, in
capital
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the capital
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 city in developing countries cars
is
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are
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 the most
convenience
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 way to travel.
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, it is the reason
to lead
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people
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to
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apply
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choose to
self-employed
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be self-employed
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that
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which
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 allows them to
work
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 anywhere
instead
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 of only in the capital city.
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, I personally believe that
to be
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being
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 self-employed gives opportunities to improve your working
skills
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. In
this
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 case, your
skills
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 will be more developed apart from
required
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the required
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skills
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 for the job description for the company.
For
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this
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 reason, it will help you to add value and outstanding
skills
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 to your profile.
Moreover
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, it could be a significant point to consider that working for a company will make your time schedule to be tight. To clarify the statement, it could be seen that the job position usually has
the
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fixed working hours.
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, the accountant in
corporate
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a corporate
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 firm has to
work
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 for eight hours per day in a week.
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, it can be
inconvenience
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inconvenient
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 in case that unexpected situation happens during working hour time. In conclusion, it is undeniable to consider that ……… I am the option believing that
to be
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being
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 self-employed has more benefits for
people
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 because it could be
the
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a
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 way to improve our
skills
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 and it could give us
to have
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more flexible time to do other activities to reduce stress from
works
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work
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.

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introduction conclusion
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logical structure
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supported main points
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clear comprehensive ideas
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relevant specific examples
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • job satisfaction
  • financial risk
  • irregular income
  • job security
  • financial instability
  • benefits
  • health insurance
  • paid leave
  • retirement plans
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