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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

the graph illustrates the data on police budget

the graph illustrates the data on police budget
The table illustrates the data on
police
Correct article usage
the police
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 budget
in
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from
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 which the
money
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 came
from
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apply
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while
Linking Words
 the two pie describe the distribution of the
amount
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 of
the
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apply
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money
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 in two
of
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apply
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year
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years
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 2017 and 2018 in a particular area of Britain.
Overall
Linking Words
, the highest sources of
money
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 in 2017 and 2018
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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national
Correct article usage
the national
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 government and the highest
budgets
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budget
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 spending on salaries for officers and staff reached the highest distribution. Looking into more details, the highest
amount
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 of
money
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 on the police budget belonged to
National
Correct article usage
the National
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 Government, 175.5 million pounds in 2017 and it slightly increased to 177.8 million pounds in 2018. The national government provides the budget for 175. M in 2017 and the
amount
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 of the
money
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 slightly
increases
Wrong verb form
increased
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 to 177.8 in 2018. The second source is from local taxes in both the period of two years in
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amount
Add an article
the amount
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 of 91.2 M in 2017 and xxx in 2018.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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