The world is consuming natural resources faster than they can be renewed. Therefore, it is important that products are made to last. Government should discourage people from constantly buying up-to-date or fashionable products. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Products
, in general, are made of raw materials
and some of them can be recycled and some are not. This
, in fact, raises concerns about a significant decrease in natural resources
and some people argue that the government
should provide practical solutions on how to deal with future up-to-date or fashionable products
to reduce natural resource consumption. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this
argument and this
essay will outline the solutions that the government
should deal with this
issue.
First and foremost, the government
must create a new campaign to support a group of research to find alternative materials
locally that can replace natural resources
or raw materials
in
which Change preposition
from
products
are made. It would be more beneficial if the new local materials
could be recycled. If this
could be done, it would preserve not only the natural resources
but also
ensure the sustainability of products
.
In addition
, the government
must consider increasing taxes on imported products
using raw materials
. At the same time, the government
must ensure that the local products
that can be recycled are virtually the same quality as the ones made of raw materials
and have slightly lower prices. With this
approach, people are more inclined to support local products
, rather than wasting their money on products
that have almost the same quality.
In conclusion, it is true that people should pay more attention to the world's natural resource consumption. Therefore
, the government
must prioritize their goal of exploring new alternative materials
by relying on a group of scientists. Also
, the government
must impose strict laws regarding importing products
using natural resources
as it helps to promote local products
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