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The pie chart below compare water usage in San Diego, California, and Worldwide.

The pie chart below compare water usage in San Diego, California, and Worldwide.
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pie
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chart
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 illustrates the
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 usage for three different purposes in
San
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Diego
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,
California
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, and the rest of the world. From the first
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chart
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 it is obvious that in
San
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Diego
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, 60% of
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 is used for residential, which is the highest use,
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 only 23% and 17% of
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 is used for industry and
agriculture
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 respectively. The second
pie
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chart
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 depicts that
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California
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also
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 used 39% of
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 for residential. They used 33% for industry, which was more than
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 used in
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Diego
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 and worldwide. About 28% is for
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 in
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 the third
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chart
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 shows the rest of the world, a very small portion, where 8% of
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 is used for residential purposes . It is interesting to note that worldwide the maximum
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 use (69%) is for
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 and 23 % for industry.
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it is clear that
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water
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 usage for residential is a very valuable commodity in
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Diego
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 and
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,
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the rest of the world shows the opposite with maximum
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 usage for
agriculture
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, water, san, diego, california, agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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