Some people think that TV is a source of information and education. Others believe that TV is useful for entertainment only. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Millions of people use TV on
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daily basis,
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where
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part of people think that it is giving new helpful
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, meanwhile
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others
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think that mostly it is
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a waste
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of time. I think that TV is a source of information and education, but in
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I will discuss both views , by
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about academic programmes and
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about
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of the reasons why we use it. At
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there are a lot of
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shows on it and most of them are really educational, like travelling, scientific programs or news, there humans can memorise some absorbing
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and learn something new. So, by watching it individuals are expanding their knowledge.
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, most
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people watch it
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they are doing something dull, so their brain can focus on something more entertaining and amusing.
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person is eating he is watching a movie, because of it, he is entertaining himself, but not learning something new.
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, I believe that it still mostly gives us a lot of useful stuff, by the
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amount of travelling, scientific programs and news, which we can view even
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are busy
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doing something boring.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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